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    dots Submission Name: Shattered me.dots
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    Author: NeonCookies
    ASL Info:    20/Female/ US, Texas.
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 18/19/13
    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Misc/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 422
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1777



    Description:
       Something about my ex.
    Something about me.
    Whom I became.
    Not in poem form, nor a rant.
    Please don't comment as; "It ill get better!"
    " You will love again." " Life get's even better."
    Etc... You degrade how I feel inside. Kthnx.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsShattered me.dots
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    Oh damn look at me now...

    ||Look at that smile, it runs for miles.
    Look at me now, so damn happy. She has no problems. ||

    == They call me miss perfect.
    They call me full of life.
    But if they only knew... ==

    || My heart shredded to pieces.
    I shrug it off like it's just another day.
    Don't bother with trying to hug it out.
    I'm just bugging is all you'd think. ||

    == Do I even have a heart, like peas and rice.
    I haven't heard it beat in months.
    That's when I turn off the lights. ==

    || The void, the emptyness.
    All I was.
    Is gone.
    All I could of been is... It..
    Disappeared into the darkness; Along with my soul. ||

    == Whom is not capable to ever trust.
    Whom is never able to love again.
    Whom is lost in her own sorryness.
    You called her, Girlfriend. ==

    || Pacing and racing to find answers.
    Answers with what's wrong with me.
    Answers I never recieved. ||

    == Why? Why am I slipping on my tears.
    Each moment I get so close.
    So near, do you hear my crys? ==


    Now.

    || The claws are out. The mask is fitting. My smile just curls amongst my face. I dance with tears in my eyes. I talk with white lies. My best friend is scar removal. Vacant eyes never felt and looked so damn empty. ||

    == Mother will never know.
    You will never touch me.
    She will never hear my name again. ==

    I hope your happy with my bloody hands on the floor.

    xo Neon




    Submitted on 2010-12-13 10:50:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ha, ironic, i was listening to Diamonds Aren't Forever when I read this.
    And now that I'm on this sight and see all of this emotion that girls have when their boyfriends cheat on them...
    I understand what my girl must've felt.
    Thanks for the poem.
    | Posted on 2011-01-21 00:00:00 | by ToMyBride | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS IS PROBABLY ONE OF THE MOST TRUTHFUL POEMS... I really did enjoy this. but we cant just kill all our ex's unfourtunate isnt it...
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by JAILBYRD22 | [ Reply to This ]


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