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    dots Submission Name: as the bullet slices the nerve...dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsas the bullet slices the nerve...dots
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    is it this again?
    as i pretend I feel nothing-
    not even a flinch at the bullet
    as it slices the nerve....
    right when the words
    spill out, then the vicodon's served
    hurts a lil less now
    all but in spite of the verbs


    feeling bad on a Thursday
    rearrange the words to say
    "hurTsday"
    had a chance but i merk'd it in the worst way
    just a slant, cuz you know i luv my word play
    sayin- sure you can read into the words- hey (*shrugs*)
    out of the hurt, dont you know u were the worst---
    verse overdosed down like druggie might
    bet you aint contemplatin like- really wuz he right?
    on and off tangents cant focus on study night
    let you outta all the things i sed thats where u'd judge me right?!.....
    and say that i dont know you
    if i really cant show you
    thats means
    ill just have to show you
    <<imagine that>>




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    ||| Comments |||
      This unfolded similar to the turning of the barrel of a snub gun.A bullet itself hitting arteries and puncturing nerves feels like a hot iron being pressed on to you.

    The street slang and gives it more appeal to a gunman, judgement of a gun holder in word play fashion.

    It releases a view of a druggy cloud that hangs over a thinking gunman with numbness of pain...I think.
    From the impact and curiosity of the titled my finger jumped into clicking the mouse to read it.I was only slightly dissatisfied with it's closure only because I was looking to read something more creatively graphic but that's just me.
    | Posted on 2011-01-29 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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