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    dots Submission Name: Saving Us The Troubledots
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    Author: einna
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.44 - 11/13/14
    Words: 275
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 784
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1566



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       Sigh... Broke-up... And he's making this harder than it has to be.
    12-13-10


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    dotsSaving Us The Troubledots
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    I let you stab into me,
    I actually handed you the knife ...
    But now that we have separated,
    I want back my life.

    I do not wish for you to stay here.
    I do not want you for my own.
    I want you to leave me, now,
    The hurt you are capable of ... Youve shown.

    I want no part of your games;
    Your manly, modern ways of torture.
    I am no longer yours to claim ...
    So I will protect my heart from you, butcher.

    Yeah, this separation will hurt ...
    But having you for mine,
    Now, that was excruciating ...
    And I think that pain is a sign ...

    Do not think me cruel ...
    You knew me once so well.
    But since that time, you have been so far gone;
    And Ive drifted too far to tell.

    It was you, who chose to leave me,
    That day I became yours.
    And since that time, I found another;
    And I refuse to deny myself such a cure.

    We can still talk, I wouldnt mind at all ...
    But if you ask me, once again,
    “Do you have anything to say before I go?”
    This will most definitely be the end.

    I do not wish to hurt you ...
    But I am hurting to much to continue this.
    I loved you once; I wanted to marry you;
    But I see that “us” is not in your best interest.

    So I am saving us the trouble.
    Myself, the drawn out pain;
    I am ending this here and now,
    In loves true and honest name.




    Submitted on 2010-12-14 10:17:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really feel bad for that guy, if this is of course inspired by a true story. Missing out on someone that not only loves you, but that once wished to be with you as well, is at the very least one of the dumbest things done throughout life. I know this feeling though (I am after all just another person in this tiny world) and can testify that being on either side is something I do not wish on anyone. As always, I enjoyed your style, even more so on this piece because you kept me reading even though it brought back such painful memories. Best I've read in the "you left me" in a while. Write on and faves add.
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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