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    dots Submission Name: spacegirl2376dots

    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 145/114/65
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1069
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I realize this poem is certainly no prize winner, but sometimes I write as a form of expression (like a lot of us do).

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    Life is full of chances
    of paths we did not take
    Yet some we traveled over
    from choices we would make

    Meetings brought by lottery
    that start with warm embraces
    Questions, stories, and laughter
    that cover smiling faces

    Candid words of things to come
    that brings us closer still
    Another week, another place
    from wine we have our fill

    Tell me tempest do you know
    just what you've given 'way?
    A moment ends tomorrow's tears
    for silence begs you...stay

    And memories of a flowered scene
    for roses made you blush
    A picture taken soulfully
    that told you not to rush

    And so you go into the clouds
    to make your choices clear
    Despite the storm you left behind
    brought on by simple fears

    I wonder if you really know
    of those that simply care
    Taken back so far away
    your memories take you there

    Do you really understand
    just why you let things go?
    The sun once warmed your broken heart
    for this I truly know

    For you I wish upon a star
    a dream of love to come
    A kiss through time, a hug or two
    of things once left undone

    Submitted on 2010-12-14 10:31:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me of Life lived and life lost and life dreamt of and life as it is and never actually written down on the Heart Tables - your Temple Scrolls.
    I just suggest that you read my "Elite Lacunae" as well as Daniel Barlows (DB) recent comment on it and I think you might follow my mindset on life as well. The other comments on it is not actually what I put forth in it but people read with their minds intent and not always with the Heart of Life. I like your poems it is fresh and not complicated to relate to. keep going Lv jm
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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