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    dots Submission Name: A Droplet of Timedots
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    Author: Alilia
    ASL Info:    18/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.7 - 28/41/50
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 778
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       A short poem I wrote while listening to a piano piece called Water.


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    dotsA Droplet of Timedots
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    Down it travels from my finger
    A
    Droplet
    Of
    T I M E
    It runs, run runs away from me
    Like Time always has

    It splashes upwards as it hits the ground that
    Droplet
    Of
    T I M E
    Come back, Come back to me
    I do not wish to die

    Sitting on the edge of the world
    A knife tickles my skin
    Red, Red comes gushing forth
    As
    Droplets
    Of
    T I M E
    Hitting the ground
    Sending the red droplets of time all around

    The bells they toll, loud and clear shaking off
    A
    Droplet
    Of
    T I M E
    It is my time to go and leave you now
    But the River of time will bring us together again




    Submitted on 2010-12-14 17:33:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the actual contents of the poem were beautiful, descriptive and imaginative. i cant say i understand the layout though... or why i am the irst of 30 to comment on this poem.
    good job, come by my page anytime
    Delillah
    | Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]


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