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    dots Submission Name: Without a Namedots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 362
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       Just trying my hand at it again


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    dotsWithout a Namedots
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    She speaks of skeleton fires and hidden eyes
    The gospel of desires and long broken ties
    Filthy little liars spinning their web of lies
    Sputtering in the mire beneath the muddy skies
    We chase the mighty dollar 'til we're blisters and bones
    Left alone, no signal on the phone
    Halfway up the creek
    All stripped down we are lead by the pathetic weak
    The meek led into a lantern flame mistaken for home
    Insanity, my friend we've met once again
    So let us raise a glass to our unspoken sins
    Caught between sycophants and silly yes men
    Don't get many visits from old friends
    Behind false smiles I see their shame
    Wishing to forget my name
    Cursed are those who are blessed
    Whose faith has never known a test




    Submitted on 2010-12-14 22:15:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im a firm believer in not all poetry has to rhyme but i will admit that when it does it flows alot more smoothly. good write, lots of imagery
    | Posted on 2010-12-14 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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