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    dots Submission Name: Plaguedots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 336
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       Inspired By Waits and Akira Yamaoka


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    dotsPlaguedots
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    I hear him digging in the graveyard behind my house
    The digger's working again beneath the foggy twilight
    That rusty shovel breaking into wet soil
    His exhausted grunts and wheezes from the strain
    It's been a busy year for him, the carrion are piled high
    The crows have bloated stomachs from their feasting
    And that smell is getting harder to ignore
    Frank said that one of the buzzards was staring at him
    Beady soulless eyes unblinking, hungry
    The other day I saw a flock of those bastards
    Gnawing on the corpse of someone's poor dog
    I wonder if anyone's cleaned up the bones yet
    Not that it matters, no one walks the streets anymore
    They stay inside, the lock tight on their door
    In hopes that death will skip their house
    If only it were that easy
    The leaves are falling off of the trees
    Branches that look like bony hands reaching for my windows
    Twisted, gnarled fingers pointing in at me
    Each gust of wind knocks the twigs against my door
    Scraping and clawing desperately like some animal frightened by the dark
    I grip my bottle tight, drinking to quiet the noise
    In my whiskey fever I toss and turn, unable to sleep
    Haunted by dreams of hounds and strangers with shattered faces
    The reaper ain't coming yet, I tell myself
    The reaper ain't coming yet.




    Submitted on 2010-12-14 22:47:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi welcome another person from canada
    this was really cool i enjoyed it from start to finish i think if you wanted to you could take this to a story and it would be great
    sandman
    | Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      jeez! i was picturing the buzzard just staring me down the entire time, :) i see em alot where i live. everything you wrote was like a picture book in my mind, it was so easy to see how it all played out. and im a big fan on anything morbid.. it comes from my childhood. good write.. i wasnt lying when i said i like your work!
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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