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    dots Submission Name: The Nightmares of Childrendots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 419
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Nightmares of Childrendots
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    I find it so hard to sleep
    Staring into the ceilings silence
    Into the blank and empty space
    These things I just don’t understand
    These thoughts I can’t escape

    I want the darkness to cosset me
    But I need the light of comfort
    Afraid my pillow might just drown me
    And through those pillow voices
    The words I hear keep echoing
    Everyone still keeps on screaming

    The vicious needle of their deeds
    I see that someone else and it’s not only me who bleeds
    And is their more pain yet to come
    As I quietly suck my thumb
    From the thorn I laid it on

    I find it so hard to keep awake
    With all these images they say are just my dreams
    Awake with pictures in my eyes
    The staring night-times cries
    With these things I just don’t understand
    I feel the pain to come
    This pain inside my thumb
    From the thorn I laid it on

    My brother plays his video game
    I wait my turn but he won’t let me pick the riffle up
    He says that I’m just not good enough
    I watch him play and I see the blood
    It’s just a shooting game, he collects more bullets and grenades
    But I still see the blood
    And then I see their pain to come
    Just like the blood inside my thumb
    From the thorn I laid it on

    The silent ceiling stares at me
    But I want the darkness to please come and comfort me
    My mummy told me to go to sleep
    But rattled machine gun fire and bloody bodies in the fire
    I just can’t close my eyes
    I want to scream back at the light
    But the pain inside my thumb
    The taste of it on my tongue
    And the thorn I laid it on
    My daddy sat me on his lap
    And I was so happy as I snuggled in to watch TV
    And the soldiers marched around
    And the aeroplanes screamed so loud
    And blood came out of that dead mans mouth
    Something whistling in the fire
    He looked just like my daddy
    And……………………….

    Mummy told me to go to sleep
    Told me to be careful next time I picked roses
    And ………………………
    The silent ceiling stares at me
    Just like the pain inside of me
    I need the darkness to comfort me
    The taste of it on my tongue
    Like the thorn
    I lay myself upon




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      nice nice

    everyone is ok with all the killing and such, like hey just another day, cant happened or will happened dont be scared of it, not realizing, it is scaring the kids

    that is what I kind of got from this

    tell me what you really meant cause I do like this
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by cripto | [ Reply to This ]


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