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    dots Submission Name: Black Holes- Star Powerdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsBlack Holes- Star Powerdots
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    Star looked at the Gravity,
    Surprised the new born was,
    "Who are you may I ask?",
    Words spoken with timidity.

    "I am the force that binds,
    this universe together,
    you seem very clever",
    They had a meeting of minds.

    While the star threw,
    In the dome particles,
    While Gravity created articles,
    It smelled like something new.

    Small asteroids and meteorites,
    Now flew around the light,
    And in their flight,
    They settled as orbital satellites.

    More and more appeared,
    And as in the air they met,
    Some of them became planets,
    Forced by Gravity to adhere.




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