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E-M-P-T-Y


Author: Mithrandir
ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
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Words: 156
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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My attempt at pretending I still know how to write


E-M-P-T-Y



This brain has sat
idle for far to long
fingers crack
and ache
with each keystroke

I've marked the years
since you faded
E-M-P-T-Y

E-motional
M-eandering
P-ragmatic
T-earless
Y-our's


Words to often hollow
shall have meaning again
with luck depth will be found
maybe even one day
I'll awake to find
I have become a man

Because
My darling Muse
your hearth is the one
of which Ive dreamed


So we start again
begging for truths
we've never known
we start again

This heart has been
numb for far to long
it strains with each beat
and remembers to feel
at the thought of you


I've marked the years
since you faded
W-A-S-T-E-D

W-aning
A-ppathetic
S-tagnant
T-iresome
E-rrant
D-ilapidated


So I'll start again
my darling Muse
begging for you
who I've never known
I'll start again




Submitted on 2010-12-16 17:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The muse is:
* a twitching synaptic shift
* how poets feign madness
* someone to blame for poor writing
* an excellent reason for sensory gluttony
* a mood swing as subtle as a wrecking ball
* none of the above
* some of the above
* all of the above
* irrelevant
| Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  I've read so many poems about muses . How they inspire , how we miss them when there gone . They raise us to new heights , and make the words flow . I don't get it . When I write my inspiration comes from within . I write about things that matter to me , and out come the words . Is your muse an outside force ? Do you have to wait for it to come , or can you cause this . Do you consider it to be more literate than you , or does it simply set your literacy free . I realize these questions have little to do with your piece , but I'm truly curious . Perhaps you could explain this phenomenon to me , or at least give me some insight .

Bruce
| Posted on 2010-12-16 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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