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    dots Submission Name: My Minddots

    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Mmm, eh, it's not that great, and is kinda muddled up, but mehh(:

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    dotsMy Minddots

    My mind a barren wasteland
    Full of Colliding Clauses
    Combined with Wistful Words
    Where Juvenile Jokes are dumped
    Downed with Inflicted Insults
    Intended for my Broken Brain
    Bringing together my Hopeless Wishes and my
    Dumb Dreams.

    A Foolish Female am I,
    Loaded with Ludicrous Love for
    Strangers with Soulful Songs
    Songs that give for a moment
    Vim and Vigour
    That I so Crazily Crave
    For my mind
    The barren wasteland.

    Submitted on 2010-12-17 00:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I resemble your remarks. Well except for the female parts I don't have those. Sometimes I can't tell if my mind is a barren wasteland or a black hole. It feels like a wasteland, one I spend hours trying to fill but everything I put in it just seems to disappear.
    | Posted on 2010-12-27 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, what Brucie said...
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece makes me want to say " Your welcome " , not that I consider myself so vitally virile as to instill vim and vigor , but I do like to think my existentially metaphysical is somewhat pandemically phatic . "Catatonic phonics even" said I of berserker . This lecherous libido liaison has written many songs about not being larcenously ludicrous . You are not a foolish female . We love portraying the apex axis crux for the infinity with a wrapper . It makes us feel our conjugationally conjunctive is cohesively coherent and all the rest of those mule kit blues .

    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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