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    dots Submission Name: Don't Ask Me Howdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 195
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    dotsDon't Ask Me Howdots
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    Sometimes when I'm tripping,
    When I am really stoned.
    I have a propensity, of intensity
    That chills me to the bone.
    When it's getting late, I reiterate,
    I know what it is, it's something I ate.
    I got a new suit of leather.
    To protect me from the weather.
    Don't ask me how,
    But I managed, to peel it off a cow.
    It's a little rank,
    This one guy said it stank.
    But, I think he is dead now.
    Don't ask me how.
    Sometimes when I'm tripping,
    You know, when I am really stoned.
    I seem to forget the niceties,
    That's usually, when I break someone's bones.
    I like things that are fermented.
    This one bitch said I was demented.
    I think she is dead now.
    Don't ask me how.
    Sometimes when I'm tripping,
    Like everyday, I am really stoned.
    I get this urge, like I'm slightly perturbed.
    This doctor said, I was mentally disturbed.
    I am pretty sure he is dead now.
    Don't ask me how.
    A lot of people that I meet,
    You know just strangers on the street.
    Well they just pass away.
    It happens every day.
    Please don't ask me how.




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      You know your probably lucky people on this site don't have your full name and address or the brain police might show up at your door . Seriously your writes are so consistently dark . When I get really stoned I usually sit and laugh hysterically with my friends . Still I seem to relate your mood . I'm schizophrenic and suffer from dementia . A condition that my shrink assures me is not temporary (oh happy days) . When I write I usually practice my sanity clause , where as you go way over the line in the opposite direction and boldly speak of the demented and depraved . I like it .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-12-18 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL @ the cow pic.
    Very cool write. I know that's how I feel... I know this guy, he's dead now... don't ask how... My friend, she was so sweet... she's buried on this street---don't ask me how. If I love someone, chances are they're doomed.

    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      A slightly morbid write; however, it was a good read, and the rhyming scheme gave it a nice beat. A different perspective from a lot of works I read. Kudos.

    Peace, love, some jazz
    Ren
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]


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