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    dots Submission Name: Piracydots
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    Author: Lelik
    ASL Info:    40/M/Jhb - South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 1194/986/192
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 613
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 492



    Description:
       Fcuk, don't think it needs one...


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    dotsPiracydots
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    As I watch the vessel's colours unfurl,
    it seems to become increasingly unclear
    in characteristic monotone or techni-spectral
    array, whether "you're my Daddy" or my dear
    should I say that all I wanted or really needed,
    to be sure of anything,
    was the allopatric rhythm of a steady heart
    of gold - and a jolly good rogering.
    I am not sure if you surrendered or heeded,
    but I stole your time right at the start.




    Submitted on 2010-12-18 04:58:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fcuk, I don't think it needs one either :) It's so lovely and clear, it stands on its own like some long-awaited sunrise.

    Oh to be so plundered, so rapturously taken...
    | Posted on 2010-12-18 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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