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    dots Submission Name: Learning Curvedots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 347
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsLearning Curvedots

    When the lovely lunatic clocked in to take over your soul,

    she whispered

    Love is gunmetal gray and smoking your wet dream.
    She is lean as methamphetamine and feeling so mean,
    she is going to take away your gasoline and matches.
    She will then set fire to your ass and stomp on the ashes.

    Then she asks

    what have you learned?

    Well I like fire.
    I want to see the flames grow higher.
    I really like rum because it leads to delirium.
    I want to see the world turn
    one more time as I burn.

    You have to hold on tight
    when molesting an alligator.
    It takes more than luck
    to whip old Darth Vader.

    Money is the best disease
    and if you sleep with dogs,
    you will end up scratching fleas.

    Revenge is best
    when served sour
    and humming birds fly on flower power.

    Oh and lunatics are lovely covered in red.
    While Love is just a bitch,
    I would like to see dead.

    Submitted on 2010-12-18 23:44:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Google "lady death" and you'll find some pretty hot images for a cartoon character among other things, even some vids. Gonna watch now.

    Birth, death, pleasure, pain, love, hate... I think there's a "she" out there to cover all the bases.

    BTW, I have written a poem entitled "She" which is one of my own favorites.
    | Posted on 2010-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      i am all about learning curves...

    i like this and the way it moves across the page. kinda sexy too, in a mean way. and funny, i never thought of death being female but it works. idk... maybe it's just me and my weird imagination... but i could see her wearing a latex suit and kick ass boots smoking a big fat cigar while whispering her sweet nothings.


    just thoughts.
    | Posted on 2010-12-23 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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