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    dots Submission Name: == Her lips. ==dots
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    Author: NeonCookies
    ASL Info:    20/Female/ US, Texas.
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 18/19/13
    Words: 372
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 945
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2200



    Description:
       A poem.
    Nothing is all it is.
    It has no effect on me.
    At all, oh yeah, Caution: Lesbian picture ahead.
    <.< Get over it, I dig chicks.
    ==


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dots== Her lips. ==dots
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    She touches my soul, trying to purify the broken pieces. Grabbing her glue. I yank her hand, "Please..." I whimper as we go our seperate ways.

    || I'm afraid to love.
    I'm afraid to be hurt.
    I'm afraid of your love.
    I'm not in denial, you cannot save me.
    It's all of the above; Darling. ||

    == I felt her in my heart,
    I swear I felt
    her linger.
    I grabbed ahold of her
    and kissed the rubys. ==

    || I'm so young, but
    not that quite dumb.
    I feel the need to lay beside her, " I feel you in my heart, I don't even know you?!" just sing to her.
    I'm growing numb, so numb.
    I tried to move my thumb,
    to feel the livening
    inside of me. ||

    == Please, oh please.
    Go.
    Just run.
    Why this heart? I don't want this. I don't need this.
    You're raping the innocent out of my heart.
    It's screaming to let go.
    The tears, beam down her pale glow. ==

    || I walked in the rain, it was all in vein.
    She was all I wanted.
    All I would of dreamn\'t of.
    I tore this hole, in my chest.
    I still remember, that finger on her...||

    == She lied.
    I lied.
    We all lied that day.
    Who knew,
    she knew.
    I drowned her in that lake.
    She pressed a stake through me. ==

    || The way she swayed her hips.
    The way she pressed her lips.
    The ways she lied to me.
    The ways she fried me complete... ||

    == " I miss the way she grabbed me."
    " Bit upon me, loved me. "
    " Believed every word."
    " Tripped over her own life cord. ==

    || I fell for it.
    She fell for it.
    We kissed.
    She missed.
    How it's suppose to be. ||

    == Now, Now.
    Good, Go, Goodby, Bye.
    Now, Goodbye. Goodbye. Buh bye. ==

    Xo Neon




    Submitted on 2010-12-20 17:13:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i feel the passion on the words and i love to flow.
    its unique to me.

    good job
    | Posted on 2010-12-23 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]


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