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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Dreamsdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSweet Dreamsdots
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    Waking up in the morning,
    After a night of drinking rum,
    Sitting up on my bed,
    Remembering what was done.

    Not much came to mind,
    Stood up looking around,
    Alone again thought to myself,
    But then I heard a sound.

    To the kitchen I walked,
    My eyes couldn't believe,
    Fixed my eyes upon your shape,
    A sight to be seen.

    The closer that I got,
    Nearer I needed to be,
    The smell of your perfume,
    Had enchanted me.

    My hands laid on your hips,
    Kissing your cheek and your neck,
    The damn alarm then went off,
    Didn't want to wake up yet.




    Submitted on 2010-12-20 17:38:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yah , I know the feeling . Every time I'm just about to get some in my dreams I get so excited I wake up .
    | Posted on 2010-12-21 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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