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    dots Submission Name: Beforedots
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    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBeforedots
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    locked are the memories of our first dance
    yet to experience in this life
    but etched into the last
    and the smiles and windblown hair and
    poems
    written on hearts
    with pens and pride.

    dare i say
    with the ebb and flow of the dharma
    the sounds of nature's footsteps
    the songs of everyday life
    it's so much more beautiful with you -
    the ordinary
    is, i mean.

    this old life's no longer dust and bones.
    the rebirth has occurred
    and we're living it
    one wink at a time.




    Submitted on 2010-12-21 06:25:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      'it's so much more beautiful with you -
    the ordinary
    is, i mean.'


    i love this part, that ordinary can be more beautiful, more meaningful when there is someone next to you.


    i like this write. i like what it implies and says.
    i like that it is more than dust and bones. i like that it breathes.

    so yea, just thoughts.

    an enjoyable read with sentiments that are relatable.






    | Posted on 2010-12-23 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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