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    dots Submission Name: Bird catchingdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBird catchingdots
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    My dearest is escaping through the wall.
    I try to catch him -

    For the scattered feathers,
    sweet flustered pigeon,
    in my hand

    behold the carnivorous curl -
    malicious lips upon the tightened vessels -

    I'll take the scissors,
    cut the whiteness
    and make my own collage -

    his shaking
    bleeding
    and resentful
    heart
    for backdrop.




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      this is so kewl I may not be a bird but I am tempted to let you cut out my heart for a backdrop. I started falling in love with you in the third stanza. The rest of the poem just hammered more nails in my coffin.
    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      1. It seem hard not to hurt
    2. A certain compliment can be like sharp knife
    3. Reliefed and a bit scattered at the same time
    4. Since I read it here
    5. Of the heart
    6. Its supposed connection to "reality"
    7. How rosty my heart's mirror is...
    8. Non-verbal communication
    9. By a bit more optimism and joy
    10. I would try not to let my fears be a co-author of the piece
    11. Somebody who is trying to convince him or herself of the meaningfulness of life etc. by words
    12. In the extend of 11.
    | Posted on 2010-12-24 00:00:00 | by namenlos | [ Reply to This ]


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