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Author: solace
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Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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so cold outside
so quite inside
nothing to do
nowhere to go
why didnt you rest my restless heart
why didnt you think my lazy head
that this boredom will pass
just let it be....
but no, i had to wonder afar
to occupy my wondering mind
should of read a book
or watched a movie
if only i knew
if only i could see
what my boredom would do
what a catastophe
i thought id play for while
whats the harm in a wink and smile...
but little did i know
that my play will cause so much pain
should of stayed at home
not wondered off in the streets to roam
an uncertain territory
which wasnt meant for me

now i wish for that quiteness and calm
which is no longer more
a little boredom i should of took
and not gave him another look.

Submitted on 2010-12-22 12:36:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  your creative ability sounds very sincere
and your sincerity comes through
| Posted on 2010-12-24 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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