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    dots Submission Name: Naked Hands.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNaked Hands.dots
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    Sometimes…
    …I wonder. Why tell me such glorious, words with no denotation
    Behind them? Do you think I merely listen
    to evoke myself in such….
    Worthlessness? But
    You have mistaken. You call such things out to me,
    And set them upon my table for me to examine. Your obscure view is
    Clouded by our fingerprints we forgot to wipe away. I’ve let it fool me,
    And tomorrow I’ll do it again. I’m rejoicing to a false comfort. For now…
    You’re a blind eye talking to a naked hand.




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      I really enjoyed the use of word play and metaphors in this piece.
    *Clouded by our fingerprints we forgot to wipe away. I’ve let it fool me,
    And tomorrow I’ll do it again. I’m rejoicing to a false comfort. For now…
    You’re a blind eye talking to a naked hand.
    ....The ending is captivating. Good job. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
    | Posted on 2010-12-26 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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