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    dots Submission Name: Missing Reel.dots
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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMissing Reel.dots
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    You emerged over my barren shoulder,
    And I permitted your absence to be
    Seen as a figure you could hold to its being.
    I broke the file in anticipation, hoping you would
    See their words they wrote against the screen. An
    Impairment seen by the blind.

    I begged of you, and all you could tell me is this world is a
    Broken projector, missing the reel. And before I asked
    I knew the answer. No others are the size of it’s blank. Though there’s
    No use for it’s mourning, we seem to be stricken and writhing with
    It like a sickness.

    I heaved. Your anchored perceptive seems
    Too close to the unenviable. My gifts are no
    Longer useful, and you tell me to continue to grip
    The handle with my broken bones? This strength you seem
    To deem real, is proving that you are constructed of lies. Each
    One probing me further down your stairway, to the back of your
    Lair. Inhaling smoke, this is all false.




    Submitted on 2010-12-24 06:57:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bringing you in with lies, but the closer you get, the more you know they are lies?
    that is what I am getting

    | Posted on 2010-12-24 00:00:00 | by cripto | [ Reply to This ]


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