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    dots Submission Name: Dear Life (Part One)dots

    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Blehhhhh keyboard smash I am so very bored. Wonder if I will ever get around to part two. Dont get mad at me after you read this for wasting a minute of your life, you clicked it :P
    I keed, I keed. (:

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    dotsDear Life (Part One)dots

    Dear Life,

    I'm breaking up with you.

    From me.

    /see enclosed document/

    Submitted on 2010-12-24 08:50:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm dittoing isabella- that /see enclosed document/ is great. It has verve (verve is one of my new favourite words. Along with illuminate and a bunch of others. But yeah: verve).

    And I already know you posted part two of this. Excellent.

    Did you see saartha's letter to myself? The ideas are similar, though where you two have taken them is somewhat different.

    I get that feeling, needing to break up with life. It's succint here, but real. And sharp.

    Anyhoo, now I'm gonna go out and check out part two.

    Hope you're having a good one :)
    | Posted on 2011-02-10 00:00:00 | by AlyRose | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that you add -

    /see enclosed document/

    even though it's not there. it's kinda witty, that.
    makes me put in my own fillers. but i am selfish that way, as a reader.

    i don't know if i have ever written a break-up poem to life. though i have thought it and find i tend to shake my fist from time to time. (not that it helps any).

    i like the idea of this though. kinda like a letter to the editor of sorts.

    | Posted on 2010-12-29 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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