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    dots Submission Name: Lunatic dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLunatic dots
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    Drink deep of the night as you observe
    one of the last rites of bygone ages.
    Throw back your head and howl
    your deference to the waning glory
    of the cadaver moon.

    Shiver in anticipation as she submerses
    once again into the nightmare of dawn.
    Follow the path etched out by the sickly glow
    of her flickering minions.

    Observe also their demise with rapt fascination.
    Fill your lungs with the cloying scent of expectation.
    Drown yourself in heady nothingness
    as those remote motes glisten
    whipping their way through vast unfathomable depths.

    Flickering candles...
    subject to the whim of charnel house winds.
    Remember: as the moon's sibilant breath
    sends streaming vapors of lucidity
    to bathe and cloak you in the full regalia of madness.

    Remember: the legions of the damned
    who now inhabit a castle of seething midnight.
    Remember: that they too once paid homage
    beneath the pitted face of this same deranged deity
    whose only gift is the bestowing of insanity.

    O' do remember
    the legions are anxious to welcome you into their midst
    and, I would expect
    if you keep staring at the moon
    it won't be long,
    until you meet
    them.








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      Really, this is superb at several levels. Half way through I'm thinking, "I gotta fav this!". Keep up the good work.

    As far as "correcting" anything, I don't feel worthy to even consider such.
    | Posted on 2010-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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