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    dots Submission Name: Poetsdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsPoetsdots
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    All the old poets perish in parturition.
    Most of their life is consumed by a line.
    Pecking away
    on keys gone astray,
    doing their best to end on a rhyme.

    I am just glad that I am an old trucker.
    I am not expected to make sense
    or rhyme.
    I only have to get where I am going on time,
    keeping eighteen wheels on my side of the line.

    Six hundred miles
    and laid over on Sunday.
    You can bet your ass I will be there on Monday.
    Detour signs drive me out of my mind
    and pretty girls
    are the luckiest find.

    While all the old poets are stuck in perdition,
    wracked by their meter
    and trying to rhyme petite,
    I am at a truck stop ordering potatoes and meat.
    Somewhere between the mountains and rainbows,

    that is where you will find me
    coasting away.
    Yip I am just rumbling astray
    down an ole highway
    and you will never catch me
    pondering a rhyme.
    Well, not while there are pretty girls
    left to drive me out of my mind.







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      Nice write. I even learned a new word.
    | Posted on 2010-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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