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    dots Submission Name: Walking In The Raindots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWalking In The Raindots
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    Yellow rain slicker and a pink top hat,
    walking in the rain so I won't get fat.
    Quicksilver lightning and aluminum clouds,
    mortar rounds of hail but I won't be cowed,
    to walk ten miles a day is what I vowed.
    Heavy metal thunder and bursting trees,
    have me a quaking in my B V Ds.
    The weather is just getting creepier.
    Black waters getting oh so much deeper.
    Pigs are sailing by on houses floating high.
    Kind of looks like it might be, swim or die.
    Yellow rain slicker and a pink top hat.
    Swimming in the rain, I'd rather get fat.
    By God, I think I'll take a vow on that.




    Submitted on 2010-12-24 21:28:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You're putting out like a proverbial coke machine. Good stuff too! Creative roll, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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