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    dots Submission Name: Coming Homedots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsComing Homedots


    Wearily I walk the trail of scarlet tears
    where the rim of the shattered mountains
    rips a jagged wound in the soft underbelly
    of a bruised and blood drenched sky.

    Black soot may be dripping
    from my sightless eyes,
    yet still I see
    where this trail is leading me.

    There she stands
    by the alter of the damned.
    How enchanting, she makes death a wanton look,
    she bends to kiss my lips,
    a hint of cinnamon and gallows breath.

    A light caress of sharpened steel highlights
    the wounded cries and dying
    sighs of every victim,
    who has ever gazed into her eyes.
    Sweetly she whispers in my torn and sutured ear
    "I never forget one of my own
    and now it is time to carry you home."

    We rise on an anthracitic breeze
    to drift over carbonized trees,
    well above the glowing coastline
    and its misshapen heaps of bestial slavered ruins.

    She says to me
    "do you like how I have redone the place?
    I was growing so bored with bright colors,
    and this quite fits my present mood"

    I only sigh and say,
    "Yes dear you have certainly outdone yourself
    this time."

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      Awesome depth. Ordinarily I'd suspect that after being continually impressed with poem after poem such as you've posted as an apparent Christmas present to us, I'd suspect that my own mood was one of (shall we say) operating on an elevated level, but I suspect that elevated would better describe your own talent as currently being practiced.

    I'm not that easily impressed but you are doing a great job in volume. I mentioned to another writer who is about our age that maybe it's just that we think along the same patterns or have similar historical references to draw upon, but whatever it is hits home.
    | Posted on 2010-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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