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    dots Submission Name: Thus It Was the Wicked End dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThus It Was the Wicked End dots

    There was a bump in the night.
    A stirring in the blackness.
    Something slithering in ooze.
    Just a glimpse of this madness
    sends reeling senses into flight
    and brings death
    to those who snooze.

    You know out there in the dark,
    drool drips from venom fangs,
    bodies bleed among the trees
    and zombies are forming gangs.
    Shredded faces bare an unholy mark.
    And bits of skin
    drift in the breeze.

    Tiny solders from alien skies
    have shown up on your doorstep,
    while gremlins
    are stripping the kitchen bare.
    Then the falling star you were keeping
    safe in your pocket
    fizzles once and dies.

    That is when you notice
    what until now you wouldn't dare.
    Right there on your head,
    A long evil strand of gray, oh so grey hair.

    Submitted on 2010-12-24 22:26:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In the words of Ronald Reagan, "well... there you go again...".
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