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    dots Submission Name: Thunder-soft Kittens dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThunder-soft Kittens dots
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    I dream of thunder-soft kittens sharp teeth
    and voracious stares,
    kitty-claws
                    ripping furrows

    and the frantic chattering of wombats before they are torn to shreds
    by cute, pitiless, demon kitties.
    I see them practicing their merciless martial arts,
    continually honing both skill and claw.

    running and pouncing      on       helpless baby mice,

    I have no doubt they are responsible for Red Robins murder.
    I watch as they purr and lap contentedly
    from pooled blood.
    Their satanic eyes so feverishly shining
    alive and aching with wanton lust.
    Oh so cleverly they attempt to hide,
    but ask any dog
    they see through the disguise.




    Submitted on 2010-12-25 01:39:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Kittens are fierce :)
    But this kinda strikes me as deeper. lol
    | Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      "by cute, pitiless, demon kitties.
    I see them practicing there merciless martial arts"

    (their?) although either works if you think about it.

    The key word here is "dream". Your dream, my dream, it seems that cats and demons (or what demons do) go together commonly enough but here we have voracious "kittens" normally considered cute and cuddly. Such is a twist, an abnormal perception which is nevertheless accurate.

    "Oh so cleverly they attempt to hide,
    but ask any dog
    they see through the disguise."

    In my own dreams:
    Cats serve to prowl the dark and catnap during the day and seeing one on your path means you should go the another way. They are being helpful in that respect.

    Dogs come and go when and where ever they want. They dominate over cats and most were cats once, so they know all the tricks and "see through the disguise". Ironically, we want to be dogs.

    | Posted on 2010-12-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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