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    dots Submission Name: Stoned Again dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStoned Again dots

    of dire consequence,
    a heavy stone
    all thought.
    A malignant brooding
    mass of reverie
    Desperation wakes
    I must write.
    Only I find that every word
    is pressing
    with oppressive sound.
    A stone of thought becomes a mountain, wracked by
    ominous storm,
    glowering forlorn.
    No less indelible than the apocalypse
    this omen
    of deep depression that marks my brow.
    It is the mark of the leaden beast I battle.
    Desperate to release myself from its grasp
    I have only
    burgeoning metaphors,
    grown obese with impacted rumination.
    I strain in vain. Gravid now and fit to burst,
    apprehension comes in waves, for looming now are jagged peaks
    streaked by the writhing fire of utter malevolence,
    haunted crags of last resort,
    beckoning me"come hither"but there is no trail
    only travail that never ends.
    My prodding becomes more malicious
    as a mucid wind spews forth to cloy
    and afflict my weary lungs. In disgust
    I rage against fatigue.
    Fuming my last paroxysm,
    frothing in a rabid haze,
    scrabbling my fingers raw,
    with cracking teeth and aching jaw
    I rend and gnaw at the damn leviathan!
    I implore the elder gods of time
    to show mercy and dispatch the dire beast.
    A great thrumming pulse begins to pound,
    worlds are ground to dust before my eyes,
    echoes of unholy midnights seethe in boundless fury
    until at last a great blast of scarlet blossoms,
    dripping warm and red, bled from depths of darkest soul.
    I, pen my life's blood upon the page:

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      This makes you Bard of bards, methinks. You have the totem. And not bad for a cross dressing trucker prone to brag about big fish. I love the picture that goes with this one.

    If you get a chance, read my "Wordsmith Blues", admittedly a bit lighter than what you have here but along a similar vein.
    | Posted on 2010-12-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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