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    dots Submission Name: Cola Bibledots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCola Bibledots
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    Where are you going people of Earth
    In what direction
    And in whose footsteps do you walk

    In which shadow
    Is your countenance cast
    By the penumbra’s of deceit

    By lies so garish and colourful neon’s light
    The reckless inconsequence
    Of your daily lives

    To what end
    In forgetful bubbles of sweet sticky bottles
    Drinks the thirsty blood of your complicity

    Where are you going people of Earth
    With your ring pull
    And your tongue of desperate silent fizzy

    You mindless giant of addiction
    Your brainless adherence to policy without question
    Uninformed lips who quote the adverts

    Where are you
    Sick caricature of humanity
    Playful stereotype of cartoon normality

    Let your hungry mouths suckle
    At the dynamic curve bottle
    And drink in the taste of your absent freedom

    Belch long and loud in your satisfied prison
    Self serve yourself some instant
    Gratification

    Where are you going people of Earth
    Your destiny a factory
    Of mass produced, but selectively owned wealth

    Your paths are born to a torturous construction line
    Television and the real thing
    Yes it is

    Better than God
    And better than religion
    Especially when the bottle is open

    Cola bible and world wide global domination





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