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    dots Submission Name: First Impressions dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFirst Impressions dots

    Will the kiss of darkness open my mind?
    Will I find my smile to be waiting there
    lying on the floor so cold and bare?
    I wonder what my smile wants me to wear?

    Maybe I should show up in something sexy
    and no doubt I should tease and style my hair.
    But what should I do for that final flair?
    Perhaps a scarlet necklace would look fetching,

    it is my smile I am bent on catching.
    A braided golden wire stretched, oh, so, tight.
    Well, had I the strength I suppose I might,
    but not tonight, it has to be perfect.

    Something that will glide with the grace of ease
    a ruby hilted dagger, if you please.

    Submitted on 2010-12-27 20:01:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Perhaps to go with the ruby slippers? My, this is a transition that bears watching.
    | Posted on 2010-12-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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