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    dots Submission Name: Love, It's the Little thingsdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLove, It's the Little thingsdots
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    I have been running all around
    this o' town,
    watching as my pouty neighbors frown.
    However, I leave it up to you
    my handsome beau.
    What kind of mischief we should get up to.

    Should we have a darling little chase?
    Would that put a smile on your face?
    Oh my naughty guy,
    tell me why you smile that way?
    What
    did you say?

    You will just have to try and catch me first.
    If you want to slake that kind of thirst!
    I am not that kind of girl,
    I do so like pearls,
    such
    pretty things they make me hot.
    I unfurl
    like a flower drinking rain.

    O' I love pretty things I do.
    I love you my beau.

    When we are riding in your Lear Jet
    it makes me so wet.
    I just melt at the thought of being so high,
    in the blue sky.
    It reminds me so much of sapphires
    and shopping sprees in Paris.

    You are so sweet when you give me
    diamonds.
    Oh, my.. I can feel the heat.
    I love you my beau
    and
    I have a friend that wants to love you too.
    Guess what!
    she likes pretty things too.

    Yes wouldn't it be a dream.
    The three of us and all of your
    Money,
    we could do everything!
    Yes, we could even do that too!




    Submitted on 2010-12-27 20:54:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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