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    dots Submission Name: Speechlessdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I don't want any bombs raining on my city,
    The sky is bright with stars too big to see, they're touching me
    I don't think you can see how hot my fire burns
    But I want to, oh yes I want to show you

    How holy is your forgiveness, are your prayers my only weakness
    And if I get freaked out or speechless, go slow
    Your breath feels like my fingertips are caressing wax figures in darkness
    And I can't follow, I can't follow you down into any dark places





    Submitted on 2010-12-27 23:20:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this seemed a bit like you were a little confused, like you wanted too do something but you knew it was wrong. good write
    | Posted on 2010-12-28 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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