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A Most Welcome Demise

Author: Mithrandir
ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
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Words: 156
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Its rubbish, thats all I seem to be able to right

A Most Welcome Demise

It was the search
for warmth
behind those
tired, fragile eyes

It was

that led
to my welcome

I thought
control was within
my grasp

but the blaze
hidden behind
amber irises
was all consuming

no trace remains
of the boy
I was

he let go
of all pretense
and believed

that she
was salvation
that she
was home

so desperate
to call her north
but that stars
already faded

now I sit gazing
for what
has long since passed

Never would I trade
the dream of her
for innocence lost

It was

that led
to my most
welcome demise

I searched
for warmth
behind those eyes
to find only ideals

the man
I long

the man
I will

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