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    Author: Blackphoenix14
    ASL Info:    17/male/AR
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 26/87/67
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I watched the moon last night....
    Surrounded by its countless stars
    Where we often find our answers and form our own images
    With each blinking star descends a thousand nails
    Shredding even the countenance which seems to be
    The moon shines ever so still
    Sitting, watching with no interference
    Where's my base?
    My center for which I can stand as it pulls me in
    Where is day?
    Such an empty realm...
    No sun to implode, or even pull me in...
    And I have yet to learn it's what holds me, still.




    Submitted on 2010-12-29 19:17:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Seems like the speaker is lost, feels as though their floating with no solid directionality. I like the wording and the questions in the middle. Very good
    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by TheInvisible | [ Reply to This ]


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