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    dots Submission Name: The Catharsisdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 912
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    Bytes: 422



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    dotsThe Catharsisdots
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    Suddenly it's over- Inhaled in an illusion; masked by apathy.
    Just shaking to erase the impending shame-

    Acted out withdrawals- Played the part as broken and errant gears---
    ---skipping the rhythm; going straight for the collision.
    Bearing no name but that- Discord and guilt peel back years---
    ---A headless man who hides; yet he tries to speak of his own volition.




    Submitted on 2010-12-30 17:31:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi

    For some reason I really like reading this. Is it because of your choice of vocabulary or is it what the piece is actually about...

    To me, this is about guilt and/or being ashamed. Like that burning feeling inside of you and you feel like everyone is watching you.

    The dashes make each line follow on from each other, but it separates them at the same time (does that sentence even make sense?).

    And also the title... A release of emotions. I like.

    Anyway, I am really sorry if I am way off base with anything...

    Thanks for sharing :)

    --Esha
    | Posted on 2011-01-20 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]


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