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    dots Submission Name: Grimm's Lullabydots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsGrimm's Lullabydots
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    Hush little baby now don't you cry
    Mr. Grimm's going to sing a lullaby.
    Just remember you are safe in my arms
    and old Grimm Reaper won't do you no harm.
    All those other babies across the sea
    they are not as lucky as little thee,
    they have skin stretched tight upon their ribs
    and rocks on the ground to make up their cribs.

    It's their daddies that sit around and cry
    without so much as the strength to wipe flies
    from their poor little babies dying eyes.
    Nope there is no food for them to eat
    there is no honey that taste so sweet.
    Hush little baby now don't you cry
    It is a mercy when I let them die.
    Oh, my precious child have you not heard

    you really must not get me too perturbed.
    I have a pit of scorpions and snakes
    where you could be impaled upon a stake.
    so you listen up listen up real good
    or you'll be left alone in the black woods.
    As for this song I am about to sing
    It's about the harmony that I bring.
    When there is no one left around to care,

    I come around like a big teddy bear.
    And when I whisper in a baby's ear
    there is nothing left in this world to fear.
    No, I am not telling an evil lie.
    When I come around it's your time to die
    so hush little baby don't make this hard
    you know it's just how fate has dealt your cards.




    Submitted on 2010-12-30 23:53:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OK, wow, I don't even know what to say to this. It's harsh, and yet there is a sad and frightening truth here too, which you have put down with apparent ease and some skill.

    I don't know how people can live without some kind of belief in an afterlife. Even if it turns out only to give you personal comfort so long as you are on this earth, what have you lost, really?

    Most of the kids younger than myself don't even know what Grimm's fairytales are. They don't know the nursery rhymes we recited with such ease that we just didn't think about the meaning of until we were older... they were morbid, weren't they?

    Now I feel like a polite change of subject. Nice fish. Looks like some kind of carp. I love fish. I like to keep them and also to eat them. Not the same ones, of course.

    Erin
    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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