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    dots Submission Name: Lovely in Red dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsLovely in Red dots
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    At first she comes numb to numb
    as rivulets that run in streams of the sun.
    Forming out of black she slides a hand down my back
    with the grace and flow of a crimson rainbow

    a child of the dark
    a lunatic a spark
    rent
    and running in red revelry

    don't you know she is so
    -lovely in scarlet-

    it matches her heart

    true love in flames was never a soul
    in so delectable a show
    O' Miss Merry Maiden its so hard to breathe in this heat

    as I seethe

    your amour is dancing deviltry into my dreams


    I just cant tell if I am burning in heaven or flying in hell
    I hear the bell
    tolling on my behalf

    I hear her laugh as she slips away
    and the last thing she said still rings in my head

    "I am part of the night and you will never forget
    no
    you must always remember
    I Bite"





    Submitted on 2010-12-31 02:46:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      We all have the potential to bite, don't we?

    The only difference is that few of us will admit it. The first thing that comes to mind is that it's like loving Joe Pesci in movies. He's a slimy, foul mouthed little pluck and yet one can't help but to find him sorely endearing.

    Some men seem to like their women fierce. I have gotten to know this over the years. After all, what could be more intimate than to be the recipient of the morning grouchies or the odd immature fit of x-excess-emotion.

    What I haven't figured out is if this is in the same thread as men loving to see an actress kick a guy's butt or wearing a skimpy outfit holding a gun with bullets strapped around and between her breasts.

    is it?

    Anyway, good write.

    Erin

    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      You know , I often don't relate to the demonically sorcerous mysticisms your writings portray , but I've got a real feeling for this one . In fact you might even say I've definitely got a succubus that resembles . This is well written , evocatively provoking , decadently ethereal and surreal . A definite fav.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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