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    dots Submission Name: New Years Resolutionsdots
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    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNew Years Resolutionsdots
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    New years resolutions

    This year I hope to walk a little further
    down that road of life, hurt a little more
    from the glass along the way. Curse
    at the thorns as they prick my legs.
    I hope to heal my wounds, and pray
    that no more thorns shall pierce;
    knowingly that in this life it's inevitable.

    This year I will live.

    This year I hope to love a little stronger.
    I hope to lose myself in his eyes,
    to make him smile in every sad moment.
    I want to fill his life with a million laughs,
    one for every tear he has ever shed.
    I hope that this year I will vow myself,
    over to the one who I love. This year
    I hope I can show him my devotion,
    that I can give him the push he needs
    to stand up as a man, and be proud.

    This year I will love.

    This year I hope to become that person,
    who I dream of being; to dance with grace.
    I hope to smile proudly, and stand tall.
    I hope to show those who say I cant,
    that I can after all; to have courage
    when the time comes that I need to be
    brave. I hope that when I reach,
    I don't reach for the stars but further.
    I hope that I do today,
    what I was going to do tomorrow.

    This year I will change.




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      i hope that every wish you have for this up coming year comes true. this was a really enjoyable read. happy new years!
    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful.. i love the ideas you have expressed here. very beautiful.
    but a word of advice too, the way you have decided to cut your lines seems very haphazard at places.
    like here in the fourth line-
    "from the glass along the way. Curse", where you end the line with 'curse'. perhaps it is better to put the last word into the next line instead. Do think about this...
    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]
      Delightful! Here's hoping that all your wishes are granted and that the new year provides you boundless opportunities!

    Happy New Year!
    | Posted on 2010-12-31 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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