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    dots Submission Name: Unwary dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsUnwary dots

    The sweet scent of prey wafts in
    on the black night wind;
    it brings cherished memories
    of snapping bones,
    and the lush rush of arterial flows,
    a warm gush guarantied to soothe
    a convulsing throats sere membrane.

    Somewhere in the taxonomy of terror
    filed under unexpected pleasures
    lies the epicure's true delight!
    It is that savory bit of mayhem
    stumbled upon in error
    that opportunity to take a bite
    to ravish the unwary.

    O to pounce upon a pretty morsel
    purely by mistake,
    when all you thought to do
    was dispose of a corpse or two.
    Yes to take advantage of a chance,
    victims come upon by happenstance,
    that is the secret of a fun filled life,
    the difference between black and white.

    The beauty that I see
    lying within your premature
    separates me from you
    and it is so delightful too.

    Remember the cliché?
    It is ok if you scream,
    because the only one who will ever hear you
    is me.

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      So she screams as loud as she can...

    and wonder why he didn't come..

    I like this especially the second stanza.
    Sometimes, the sweetest things in life are our biggest mistakes. It helps us grow. The purest of pain make us see life clearer. I know that now.
    To take a chance,
    To take a risk,
    That's what makes life exciting, the uncertainty of life is worth taking. Otherwise, if you're too safe to step out from your comfort zone, such life would be very boring.

    Sorry I don't have any constructive to say, you know I'm poor in grammar. Maybe jus this " a convulsing throat"

    | Posted on 2012-09-25 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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