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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Evildots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSweet Evildots
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    As the moon is devoured and
    skeletal dreams arc from dark crenellations.
    We find the White Knight seeking surcease
    from his demonic lovers fatal charms.
    The White Knight is beyond weary, mortally
    wounded the quick of him ebbs as he dreads
    another witching-hour. For she comes to him
    in sleep, stalking with such stealth, curling
    a tongue of flame about his innocence.

    She demands that he rise to battle sweet evil.
    Her lips are an engulfing cauldron that immediately
    bring sweat to a tortured brow and though he thrust
    mightily it is to no avail. She anticipates each lunge with
    cunning riposte to leave his loins aching, vision
    blurred.

    The moans of the White Knight escalate to
    fervor pitch but no matter how hard he presses his adore,
    he finds naught but frustration. There seems no
    hope of relief to torrent building.
    In retaliation he resorts to guile
    and fastens upon her own nub of
    tribulations praying that torment given
    might at last grant him mercy in his need.

    But the duel is endless and every night the same.
    The White Knight is beyond weary
    yet in his eyes feral ferocity still shines.
    He is the White Night and in every night
    lies the pure heart that brings
    Victory.




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      That's right , kicking and screaming , cradle to the grave , a little bit of genocidal xenophobia , and a brusque macabre abrupt , throw in a corporeally preternatural on the existentially metaphysical . That should get em ! Mirador bartizan panorama tableaus and fabulist facade fantasias . Dexterous gargoyle disguise gimmick camouflage and corrupt costume counselor . Splurgeness spry sporadic sprawl , spurious staunch succinct stymie tacit , tirade treatise vehement escapade tedium . Chutzpah panache spontaneous generation complicity , gambit alluvium aloof succor .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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