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    dots Submission Name: To this Grave I am wed dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsTo this Grave I am wed dots
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    My sight grows dim...
    In the rancid wind.
    I wandered into this valley,
    Upon a moments whim.
    I heard about this place,
    Filled with a fueled fire..
    It beckoned me,
    Made promises... so sweet
    So tempting and like a ravenous
    Bat I lapped up the honeyed blood..
    But I slipped and lost control.
    Now I am trapped, encased,
    So cold devoid of self.
    Heart stops beating....
    while maggots feed.
    Passions Soar from cuts so deep
    I acquire, a lovely tainted sheen.
    A wrecked man of tragedy
    I think not look at me I gleam.

    ...You see...

    Look deep and tell me
    That you do not hunger
    For the scented secrets..
    Wafting from my grave.
    Let me hear you deny me.
    I want you to say...
    You have no love for what I am..
    You would be lying.
    I am your creation.
    I am the afterbirth I burst
    From the belly of this earth.
    Because you are rotting from within
    And I am every dream
    I exist as the result of your sin.
    Where you condemn, remember
    I am not Dead to the world,
    Wasting away through the soil.
    In my little grave I toil.
    Smell the unearthed worms,
    Bound gagged in turmoil,
    Come join me lets play.
    My youthful spirit yearns,
    My flesh is impure it burns.

    (This is a collaboration I did with a poet going by the pen name Twistedsoul)






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