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    dots Submission Name: Birthday Treatdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsBirthday Treatdots
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    Somber Clown cappers to an awe sick sky
    Burnt by breath of dragons passing by
    Fading shades of fairies dripping dreams
    The show tonight grips you tight
    It glues you to the scene
    Vermillion flower skeletons
    Glowering from mezzanines
    Vacant staring zombies
    Eating clouds of tangerines
    Crimson rain patters down
    Crimson splatters on the ground
    Little Miss Mary's pale and scary
    Little Miss Mary's all unwary
    Bright red butterflies stitched and bound
    Bright red butterflies on birthday gowns
    Somber Clown Happy Clown
    Party Clown chambering rounds
    Going to bring the big top down
    Jacking jackets coughing clatters
    Dreams in tatters what's the matter
    Its just a Clown mad as a hatter
    Birthday treat aren't Clowns neat




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      Subtle solace savvy like a suave and sultry specter surreal . Clambering clamorous clangor's exserted protuberance , and erotica erectile errantry . Catatonic phonics . Aorist actuator acoustics , and accidence ambience . Incarnate encephalic enunciate endeavor . Moxie ! What a clown I must appear .

    Bruce

    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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