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    dots Submission Name: In a Red Levin Skydots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsIn a Red Levin Skydots
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    Like Lacquered Layers of Lunacy
    my Manic Muse is haunting me.
    Yes, in fact, she is stalking me

    with wicked wiles; she tauntingly
    has colored my philosophy.

    She bemused my eyes
    with Red Levin Sky.

    A cavorting chaos of feral femininity,
    She deliciously and implicitly

    pins me to the wall,
    piercing me to draw-

    in a panting burst of ecstasy.
    The beast of primeval primacy

    she flaunts before my eyes
    in a Red Levin Sky.

    My Manic Muse is riding me.
    My wits, it seems, are soon to be
    trickling out for all to see.

    In a carnal feast of imagery,
    I am lost within her sighs.

    Consumed

    In a Red Levin Sky.




    Submitted on 2011-01-01 07:20:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Classic stuff, even musical to a degree, but it also seems to say it's time to click the slippers, go back to Texas and let Dale have a little rest. A Muse should not bully her host when an afterglow is already overdue.

    There's always tomorrow... or perhaps manyana works better.

    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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