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    dots Submission Name: Houston we have a problemdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 293
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    dotsHouston we have a problemdots
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    Crystal Splinter Donut Cake
    I think I have a belly

    I awake to the pitter patter of rainbows
    Tumbling softly down
    To the ground
    They shattered into pieces of sugar candy
    Sprinkles
    With a crinkling tearing sound

    I can smell anemones
    Singing
    In the tops of spinning bamboo trees
    It seems the world got smacked
    Reality is cracked

    Sanity lost its hook or I am missing pages from
    The book
    I stare out the window at a tall coke glass
    Where a six toed midget
    In an ice cube dingy is fishing for bass

    The air in my lungs feels like leaches
    Squirming in a sponge
    So I grab my hat from the judgment rack untried

    Then with one lose shoe and too tight
    Of a screw
    I cast myself as the lead in my own play
    Before I am thru
    Einstein is turning blue
    Walking on his hands in an alien zoo

    He is
    Explaining the theory of intercreativity
    Using reality deconstruction
    To support his assumptions
    So I
    Just click the channel to MTV
    And watch a five piece band
    Of burning fleas play rag-time on
    New mown sand

    I figure it is too early for lunch
    But I want
    Something healthy to munch
    One thing I know for sure It is time for my Morning cup of coffee
    If its not to tough to chew

    Then I think I will go back to bed
    Maybe if I just sleep through all of my tomorrows
    I will wake up to some
    Pepper parchment pleasers
    With a less compromising point to review







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    ||| Comments |||
      This is sooooo Blue Dolphin acid trippy! It makes me want cookies, and I don't have any.
    | Posted on 2013-03-26 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Getting enough sleep lately?
    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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