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    dots Submission Name: Happy 2011dots
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    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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       *Sigh* Time to go to work.
    P.S. This isn't a poem.


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    dotsHappy 2011dots
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    This was our aftermath. Effects of the earthquake in my head, started by what had happened earlier that evening.
    I saw you. I caught a glimpse at you in a crowd I felt I was left out of: so like a coward I hit the panic button and shoved myself through the congregation earnestly,
    escaping the possibility of being seen by hiding behind others.
    Fuck. It was looking like High school all over again.

    So at 12:00AM when the fireworks were finally lit,
    and cheering was heard throughout, resounding,
    BOOM, BOOM, BOOM-
    smokey vapors seen off the moist river,
    clouds of gray clogging up the sky...
    I'll admit that,
    the moment the first explosion lit,
    it seemed to sync with my heartbeat,
    and I started sobbing in despair.

    Happy new year, happy 2011,
    happy wedding to my Father, and my new Mom.
    Let's hope I'll be just fine.




    Submitted on 2011-01-01 15:55:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I Really Love your style of Writing this Poem is Super Cool.... Keep it up
    | Posted on 2011-12-14 00:00:00 | by Marybelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Hope it's all working out, Meiko. I like your name, and I love your poem. Best wishes for you this year.
    | Posted on 2011-02-16 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed your writing style with this piece! I think it was interesting the way you talked about the new year, and then talked about your new parent. Awesome imagery and awesome write is all I really have to say. I'll definitely be checking out your others. :)
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]


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