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    dots Submission Name: Insomniadots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsInsomniadots
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    To somnolence, whose striking features
    Across my trembling lid in red
    like stricken vessel's final tickle
    in waves of the receding sense -

    take off your shoes, o silent Bedouin,
    and watch them dancing on the dunes -
    and feel the breath of lucid petal
    of eye to eye beneath the many moons

    upon the cheeks grown suddenly so sober
    from prophecies engraved by someone's frenzied hand,
    and free the firebirds that hover,
    suspended on the verge of truth, yet never land -

    To you, my friend, I send my nightly prayer.




    Submitted on 2011-01-01 16:13:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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