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    dots Submission Name: A def thingdots

    Author: shatty
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Well im from a country in the caribbean and recently there was a surge in crime so i decided to write this poem

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    dotsA def thingdots

    They say the killings in the streets are senseless

    They say the youths in the streets move relentless

    Like wild beasts not like birds with a coop to nest

    Coops that teach manners

    Coops that teach respect

    Coops where those in charge says another man’s life is just as important as yours

    Coops where they show you how to use a pen and a book instead of giving us hooks

    Hooks that we use to hang, defile, rape, rob and the list goes on

    That’s what one black bird hands down to its chicks today

    Virgin trigger finger cowards…cowards I say cause they hide,

    hide behind the shadows of the night

    hide behind a mask…shit..not looking out for the innocent passers-by as they

    pass by not knowing their fate..thier untimely paralysis by the hands of a black guy who is high on drugs

    drugs called stupidity, lawlessness, ignorance wtf I’d rather be high on weed

    black seeds that spread chaos they say.

    Or should I say we say, she say or he say but when its all boiled we all said it.

    One random act causes another and another and another until a pattern develops that’s the chaos theory

    Let your first act be that of peace and wisdom let the pattern develop.


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