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    dots Submission Name: Driving Nailsdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDriving Nailsdots
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    Your cheating heart is driving nails
    in the bottom of my shoes.
    Your back door ways
    have turned my days

    into bubbling possum stew.
    O, honey why don't you
    love me like you did not so long ago.
    O, honey I am all broke up.

    I feel like I have the flu.
    You busted this old heart apart,
    when you took off your pantyhose.
    Then you showed that city feller

    with the spoon stuck up his nose
    the pert little dewy petals
    of your pretty kitty's pink, pink rose.
    Honey I feel like an exhibit at the zoo.

    All the neighbors are snickering at me
    Because of the things you do.
    I'm just like one of Santa's elves,
    working without my hard-earned pay.

    That city feller gets your lovin
    Whiles I'm out a baling hay.
    If you are wondering,
    where I am at today?

    Well I figured out sure enough to say.
    This is a game the two of us can play.
    So you just go ahead n' sleep tight tonight.
    I won't be there to fuss nor start no fight.

    I will be enjoying those city sights,
    'cause it turns out your city slicker feller.
    Is the kind of feller
    that likes to while his time away

    writing poems
    and a getting boned.
    By blue country boys
    that sashay both ways.




    Submitted on 2011-01-02 16:07:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ROFLMAO! Ohhhhh, I did so enjoy this one... truly did.
    I have a gay male friend in TN who I sent a gift to this year, along with his new ummmm Significant Other, who is a buddhist it turns out. Since he doesn't do Christmas he was unprepared to gift back, so I was offered any piece of his artwork that he has for sale right now. After seeing it all, I really was troubled/disturbed by it all, especially by one particular painting called "My First Time", and one particular sculpture called "69" ... I sat staring at it for quite awhile before deciding what I wanted was not a piece of art, but to watch these 2 have sex... I mean, I have just GOT to see the mexican mule dance these boys are doing that inspired THIS sh!t that I'm staring at. (I don't think that's a lot to ask, do you? They seemed to disagree...)

    Anyhoo.... Yeah. This is a funny write, it has my mind sinking back into the gutter again.... it's funny and all vomit-pink in the gutter, with bright flecks of blue gummy bears peeking out.
    | Posted on 2011-01-02 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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