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    dots Submission Name: You'll See. it won't be longdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       Almost together a year... something will happen.. you'll find a way to boot me out of your life


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    Never been good enough for anything,
    What makes you think this would be any different?
    My train of thought would suddenly change?
    Always considered myself a failure,
    either not smart enough,
    or quick enough for the task at hand.
    Why's this any different?

    In my mind
    I'm like the others
    In my brain
    I'll end up hurting you like them

    Always comparing myself you never see
    I'll do it while your sleeping right next to me
    I'll say something to make you smile
    then have to wonder if she ever made the same corny joke?

    I've never been enough for anyone to keep around for a reasonable amount of time
    my expiration date is closing in fast
    Its only a matter of time till' you see

    I'll never be enough
    I'm only a failure as I've always been




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      as poem this is cinematic,like am a watching this play out in our bedroom,
    but then is this a reflection of theway u actually feel,well let it be known that one mans trash is anothers jewel< so whenever we feel we too inadequate sometime its just athought( rogue thought),
    yep some times when we accustom our minds to certain negative tots, our body ,begins to work in tandem ,thus negate all our endearvor.
    please get such tots out.
    and in relationships all men cant be on the look out for the very same things.

    so know ye now , that do what is right ,try to correct those things that ur significant other comments and try to e ur nice self.

    girl u deserve to be happy, i have been reading ur stuff so i am a fan
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooops. I meant his past. Lol. Sorry.
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say I rather enjoyed this piece because it helped me a little into your world, it helped me see from your side. Great display of emotions, it seems they are controlled, and that is the way, in my opinion, they need to stay.

    I have to ask though, if you've been together a year, why such doubt in your relationship? It looks, according to what I get out of the poem, that you are the one who makes up that you are not good enough, but I don't see where the person you are writing about says that. Why automatically put yourself as the same as someone in her past....? Why not be yourself and ask your significant other if you are different?

    Just a thought...I'm quite a curious person.
    | Posted on 2011-01-05 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is a very emotional piece to read for me personally. i often feel the same way, and then something happens to change my though process to a much happier frame of mind. and something reminds me that i am not a failure not if i keep trying and keep pushing forward. i hope that someone or does the same for you. as for the piece itself i found it very raw and in its rawness comes a power in the words you choose good job .
    Joy
    | Posted on 2011-01-04 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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